Comments : If Only I Never Knew You

  • 16 years ago

    by Nee

    This is really nicee..the title was captivating too, sometimes the title is more important than the poem because it's the reason people are inspired to write !
    lovely poem, I felt those words and all the if onlies here were so touchy !

    Instead I sit here desolate
    Reliving every day
    People asking what is wrong
    Not knowing what to say
    I think the rhyme here went a bit off, last line could've been better, even though its still good :)

    Sometimes it's hard to figure out
    If all is worth the cost
    this could be an interesting quotation here, very wise and I do agree with all of this.

    well-done hunnie, I think you're going to be a great poetess when you grow old :]
    write on
    xxx

  • 16 years ago

    by Lulu

    I love your poem!!!!!! i can relate to it..im goin trough the same right now but keep up da good work
    Loka

  • 16 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "If our eyes had never met
    No spark had lit the fire
    I would not be burning now
    Lost within this pyre"

    Beautiful stanza, really well written and this just stuck out to me. The truth and wiseness of your words in this poem touched me, and your thoughts really poured out into this poem. Your word choice and rhyming was very interesting and kept me reading. Good work, 5/5 from me. Keep writing, always and forever...