Very good, I really liked "I love you
We've been taught to covet these words. But they say so little. I want, no, need more.

I love you.
but will you forget me in the morning?"

But I think it would be a good idea to get rid of some of the ones that don't mean as much to you, and jsut keep the best, because it starts to loose its meaning when it's gone on for so long. great premise, well writen, just dragged on for too long

I love you
useless love songs. The same over played cliches. It's useless. Or am I just jealous?

I love you.
Every time I hear that I think of how love wanes. When does it wax?

I love you
but I will never forgive you

I love you!
A mother welcoming her child into the world

I love you
the last words and thoughts of people in the Twin Towers.

I love you
there is no more meaning in these words. They are barren mothers of deformed children.

just some that you could get rid of, some because they are slightly out of theme, others because they are alike others that are already there

Another tip : I would order them more from the mad kind of ones( like the one about a guilt trip ) together in the middle. the ones about how it doesn't mean much at the beginning and the romantic ones at the end, just so its not so all over the place :)If I get a chance I'll see if I can do it to show you what I mean and see what you think of it.

* Again, all just in my opinion, its still a great poem and I understand if you don't want to take any of my advice bacause there isn't any reason why I know better than you. I am only attempting to help because I know it helps me to have a different pair of eyes look at my poems and give me advice :)

again great poem :)

5/5

Surprising poem this:) i mean that in a good way. it's one of those poems that everyone has hidden inside themselves somewhere but only a few can acctually break it down and put it out there. you dear, possess that skill!