Comments : Completely Incomplete

  • 16 years ago

    by Sora

    Wow. i loved this! it was so different from anything i've read all day, and for awhile. i love the title it's quite eye catching. you got your message across well also. you chose your words wisley and it turned out perfectly. and the ending was great. job well done. 5/5.

    -Ashlei.

  • 16 years ago

    by StandStill

    I don't know what to say about this one. i do like it though...5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by DreamingOutLoud

    The fire in the music
    Burns behind your eyes
    - the person you were trying to be has just killed you inside <

    Just a suggestion, but you need to re-write the two last lines; and then your poem should sound better because its got so much significance throughout it and the last two lines kind of take away that.
    but over-all nice work.