"I had one person to live for,
no less and no more." This is my favorite line in the poem, mainly because it rhyms. I think that if you can make the other lines rhyme, it would add greatly to this poem and add a sense of rythem because in this state, it seems as if you took a few sentences and split them. Edit, edit edit! :)

You have portrayed your emotions very well, but the message is intensly sad. Why would you not want to live for yourself?

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5/5 Ingrid

Im sorry...very good poem tho...but if u ever want to talk im always open! 5/5

Awww. so sad. *tear*. love it. great ryhem (dont kno if i spelled that correct) and great flow. i can feel the emotion just pouring out of that poem. KM

I hope your solution to feelings of rejection is exaggerated, but I believe you made your point.

Oh darling, this was just so sad. it always saddesn me when people are left behind so filled with hurt and pain after the loss of the loved one, weather it is a death break up or what ever it may be it always hurts.

i agree with NightmareChild that forced rhyming isn't always the best thing to do because poetry doesn't need to consist of rhymes its the emotions and feelings of truth that go into the poems which really count but never the less i still loved your poem. it was really strong and very powerful. great work and keep it up!!!!