It was a good poem. i liked it, i had 2 read it twice coz the first time i read it, it didnt sound right to me. but it was a great poem and i love the message your getting across. it was an awesome poem. 5/5 from me

Interesting poem. The idea of the poem is depicted very clearly. The flow is pretty good. A few things I'm not quite sure of though.

In the second stanza, did you mean "through" rather than "threw" in the first and last line? And in the last line of this stanza, I think you forgot the 'o' in last 'too'

And in the third stanza, last line, did you mean "Too bad" rather than "Today bad"?

Besides that, it was a good poem. =)

Hmm too bad u do it right!!! it has a good meaning and u had express whats really inside ur heart, and i feel those real emotions that comes in ur heart. so just keep on writing all what u feel. and keep up the good work. the message has a great dedication. 5/5

Some of your gammer is off but for the most part it was done well. The flow was choppy you will get there Plot121

Hmm, I like it. I like the message behind the poem.
And I like what you're trying to write about.
You've got the emotion brushing off the words.
And I like the beginning, it really grabbed my attention.
Also, the flow was a bit rocky.
Besides that, the poem was great :]

Wow a totally new read for me here... the first stanza just made me go " whoa.."

and the rest of the poem followed in pursuit.
but this kind of poem is just... very interesting to me. great job though!

5/5