by Steven Topaz Sep 19, 2008
category :
Love, romance /
love is
On this poem |
by Jenni Marie
"On this poem |
Sorry, I accidentally submitted it before i was finished, I just wanted to say if you DO fix those, it is a great poem, but the fact of all the errors.. it depletes the significance of it to the point that i did not enjoy reading it as much as i would have. I would give you a 5/5, but i have to give you a 4/5 because of the grammar problems, though you are a talented writer. |
Okay. I liked this, but I want to let you know there are many spelling errors and the way it was written forces the reader, or it did to me, to read this three times before truly being able to read it. I can critique you on some of it, but most of it is simply poor grammar. |
by Spirit
*Ok then, I'm going to be nit-picky again. I have changed your poem around a bit to give your poem a beat/flow/rythem/what-ever. I hope your not to mad and it you are. then you can ignore this message. |
by Spirit
Ok this is me being nit-picky again. now please don't take this the wrong way. I wanted to make some subtle changes, (if i ruin it forgive me) that would improve the poems beat/flow/rythem/what-ever that might help you in the long run. here try this. |