by Jessica
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by Paiger
Wow, amazing emotion :) well writen :) |
Wow... that made my eyes water. It was like that poem was speaking to me. Great job. This poems one of my favs :) 5/5 |
by Jessie
Incredible, you say your only 14? holy shit.... I loved i loved "crying by day, dying by night." it has such powerful emotion |
by rebeccasarah
"The evil people lie. |
by Dominique
Wow that was good...i feel that pain...good job |
Overall it was kick ass, but it would be more so kick ass if you work on these more in the future: |
by Sweet lig
Wow that was really wonderful. i love those rhyming words it really enjoyed reading it. great words and imagery.. 5/5 |
by Perfection
Very cool. I like how you dont rhyme same always... Some might find that as a bad thing but to me it gives it a relaxing feeling. It was easy to read and understand. Flowed very well. |
I is really quite ummm...painful..i can feel the emotions you want to convey..Th flow is great and your style is kinda unique... |
by Dark Savior
I gave it a five and truly did appreciate some of the metaphores that you used. I coul be picky and say this or that. Truly I wouldn't be very nice of a person. |
by AmberSherrellxxIve Been Sitting Here Trying To Find Myselfxx
Wow...it takes a lot for me to add a poem to my favorites but you have done just that.Mainly because I can relate to this poem 100%.But some words don't need to be capitalized,some words are spelled wrong, minor grammar errors.But 5/5 for sure! |
Wow. this was really amazinqq! |
by Kimberley
Omg i almost peed myself! pardon the rude language but that was.... aweaome. it was just so... amazing. 100/5!!! ^__^ ~KM~ |
by AmberSherrellxxIve Been Sitting Here Trying To Find Myselfxx
Wonderful!Brilliant!I loved the closing.I saw some simple spelling mistakes and grammar choice,but this poem was really great.Simply beautiful!5/5 |
by Spirit
Ok this is me being nit-picky again. now please don't take this the wrong way. I wanted to make some subtle changes, (if i ruin it forgive me) that would improve the poems beat/flow/rythem/what-ever that might help you in the long run. here try this. |
by Spirit
*Ok then, I'm going to be nit-picky again. I have changed your poem around a bit to give your poem a beat/flow/rythem/what-ever. I hope your not to mad and it you are. then you can ignore this message. |
Okay. I liked this, but I want to let you know there are many spelling errors and the way it was written forces the reader, or it did to me, to read this three times before truly being able to read it. I can critique you on some of it, but most of it is simply poor grammar. |
Sorry, I accidentally submitted it before i was finished, I just wanted to say if you DO fix those, it is a great poem, but the fact of all the errors.. it depletes the significance of it to the point that i did not enjoy reading it as much as i would have. I would give you a 5/5, but i have to give you a 4/5 because of the grammar problems, though you are a talented writer. |
by Jenni Marie
"On this poem |