Summer's Warmth {Nonet}

by BREEawNUHH   Sep 20, 2008


--My FIRST Nonet. And I THINK the syllable count is right. But be nice. :P

Puffy white clouds cover up the sun
hopefully they will soon clear out
so the world can be lit up
and shine brightly on us
while children go play
and laugh loudly
in the warmth
of the
sun

Briana Coulter
09.20.08

**NONET: A form that consists of nine lines. The first line has 9 syllables, second has 8, third has 7, fourth has 6, and so on..

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  • 16 years ago

    by Stephanie

    "Puffy white clouds cover up the sun"
    - I love your usage of the word "puffy". I could actually imagine big puffy clouds in my head. (:

    "while children go play
    and laugh loudly"
    - This was such wonderful imagery. Amazingly done.

    For your first nonet, this was nothing short of fantastic. Your word usage was simple, yet perfect & your use of imagery was magnificent. Nicely done.

    5.5
    Take care,
    Stephanie.

  • 16 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This is a beautiful nonet and the natural imagery goes deeper and rises above

  • 16 years ago

    by LockedInEternity

    This was a very nice write.
    I've never tried a nonet myself, but im sure it was a bit of a challenge that i think you handled very well.

    the count was perfect..i know cause i counted xP .. lol, not that i dont trust you, but just to check. and i like the way you split the last sentence up into the last 3 lines -- very clever and ended the poem beautifully x)

    overall.. i really enjoyed reading it.

  • 16 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    This was such a beautiful write. You described this so well that I could have painted a picture using the description, it was that good. The syllable count seems to be correct as far as I see. I'm very impressed. Glad to see that you tried this form, it's really fun to play around with. I loved the word choice and description of this write. It is very beautiful. Well done! 5/5. :]