Nice one, ur diamond shape is different than ours *feels jealous* :D... kidding... really liked it :)
gud luk
keep writing

I really enjoyed reading this. I thought your word choice was great, and I feel like you got a lot across with few words. To be honest, there is not much more I can say about it. lol. I wrote something like this once.. in the 4th grade. Mine came out.. really bad. Hahah. But really, though -- I loved it.

Five out of five. [5/5]

``Briana

Those are hard to write.. had to do one for my daughter.. very nice job and to the point.. really liked it:)

I like the fact that you write in your own rules...keep it up..very nice job

I loved the form, i just wish on this site we could actually write concret poems. i thought the vocabulary could have been better, but overall this was pretty well written. In the definition of this style i did not see anything where it said the 4 words had to be 4 letters, so i was wondering why you chose to do so when other, longer, words, i feel, could have worked much better with the poem.
i did, however, love this style, and i thought you executed it well.

`:Lauren

"Heart.
Forlorn, shattered"
--I liked this. It introduced a common topic: a broken heart, but I liked your word choice. Forlorn has an excellent usage in this part. Great way to start off a short piece.

"Bleeding, aching, screaming.
Love, soul, beat, rate."
--I liked how you used screaming. It really personifies a broken heart and how that person feels. Bleeding was used well too. It really was a good follow up to the previous lines. I liked beat and rate, and it ties nicely to the previous and following lines.

"Dying, cracking, breaking.
Dull, abnormal.
Pulse"
--Again, I'm finding the words in this poem well used. I like how it really shows how the heart is broken after a mishap. Dull and abnormal were a nice change too. I don't see abnormal often, and it was cool to see it used. Pulse really wrapped up the piece, and I liked it.

Overall: I enjoyed this poem. I like short poems, and this was a good example of a diamante.
Excellently penned.

--Krista