That was really good. The last two lines really brought the whole poem together. You need to change the " to a ' in the second and last stanzas though. Besides that it was powerful and dark. 5/5

You write some really deep stuff and I am enjoying getting to read more of your poetry. You have a few minor spelling mistakes in the poem but other than that you are a fantastic heart felt writer and your poems do not seem like they are forced which so many do now days. Great Job and Take care...
Kay

This is nicely written true emotions and dark...your peotry are based on some pretty deep stuff and some are incredable...this is absolute emotions and this iv enjoyed reading keep it up and ill continue reading