Comments : My Friend, I Love You

  • 16 years ago

    by Mishka

    Hey Michela, this is really beautiful... i love the whole flow of it except, maybe, the very end...

    "But please keep it a secret
    To avoid ending up with regret"

    To me this sounded a bit awkward... and to be honest, I am not one to judge poetry... but maybe you could think a bit more and make it sound a bit better so that the end pangs you in the gut, you know what I mean? It seemed like one too many syllables in that last line.

    But other than that, this is reallllly good. :)
    Amazing job!

    5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Big hersh

    Liked it, it was very sweet keep it up