Comments : Forbidden

  • 16 years ago

    by Paiger

    Beautiful :) I always admire when people can describe so much, so well, and with so few words :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    ..a secret, keep it quiet, please don't tell.

    I love this poem, it's flow and theme are all pleasing.

    You begin with defining words in the whole stanza. Forbidden love, lust, secrets kept and always trust.
    ^
    This holds so much weight and sets the scene for the rest of the poem.

    Fobidden friends...and that one lie!!
    ^
    This one lie jumps out at me as being very important. Lying can ruin a lifetime of trust, it can penetrate the uninpenetrable, even love!!

    Forbidden conversations, always remember those times we had.
    ^
    Sounds like a farewell to dialogue that will never be repeated again, friends no more!

    Forbidden memories, forbidden today and forever..
    ^
    This is so final, so definite..there is just no way back.

    This poem is filled with painful regret and brimming with sadness. Although it suggest a relationship of 3 and because of it a air of seediness, it is still very sad to read and makes the reader feel sorrow for the loss of a great potential love that never reached its hights.

    Well done on this poem and welcome to the club. :)

    Michael

  • 16 years ago

    by Andi

    Beautifully written,

    It's amazing.