My advice
by Grant Gilbert AKA Slash Sep 23, 2008
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My advice |
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15 years ago
by Cara
Wow. i dont think i have read any of your poems before, and this was a great first. i loved it. it kept me reading till the end and i read it over again, because it was so touching the first time.
the flow was amazing, it made it so easy to read. this has actually got to be one of my favourites and i am very glad i read it.
your rhyming was terrific and overall a fantastic poem.
i am going on to read more of your stuff, because this was awesome. -
16 years ago
by Ingrid
A very good poem, my friend..I wonder who you wrote it for...
Love and lust do go hand in hand...but sometimes we feel only lust for someone we meet, that does happen too, you know!
In the best of all situations you love someone and lust for them as well and only that one person...it is best for the peace of mind of both parties:)
Hugs for my wise friend...and hero:)
5/5 Ingrid -
16 years ago
by dirtyhands
Wow,,i really love the rym,
really great
Lust and love go hand in hand
Misery scattered like fine sea sand
You came to me on bended knee
This advice I gave for all to see
*this part is my favorite
this makes me smile,,
just just the reapeated words took my atention,it really bothers me like the word crumble on first and second stanza and the finest hour on the second and fourth stanzas,,
like it takes the rym,,
but i really love it speacially the rym and the direct to the point title,,
still 5/5
two thumbs up! -
16 years ago
by kelleyana
Waw, you are kind hearted. Not much of us are our sisters and brothers keepers. We are so many in this world yet many of us are so alone thinking we can't count on anyone just our ownselves.
I like the way you expresses thoughts and situations throughout your poems. Well done, kel. -
16 years ago
by Roxy
Grant you seriously sound like such a sweet guy and this poem makes your personality shine :) It shows everyone here on poems-and-quotes what you are all about and how you are willing to help with everything :) I love your rhyming and choice of words for this poem it's full of meaning. I loved the fifth stanza I'm not sure why but something about it made it special to me :)
xxxxxxxxx 5/5 Much love,
Roxy
