Second PLace. +Ending

by sexyCheckers   Sep 24, 2008


Just add this on to the ending of my poem
Second PLace.
By adding this, would it ruin the poem? Or make it better?

I hope she crashes and burns,
Literally. I hope she dies.
Not only because she'll be gone,
But because I want to see you cry.

Then you'll be able to see my pain,
Go through what I have,
And maybe then you'll cherish
Everyone you still have left.

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  • 16 years ago

    by 0oAshleyo0

    I like this on the end.... the other ending wasnt strong enough to show a girl thats coming in second with a guy she loves... i like this one better :)
    good job

  • 16 years ago

    by Blueleo

    Wow, some strong words. I totally felt the anger. I think a bit more of an introduction would have made it easier to swallow, but I like the direct anger. Really gets the feeling across.

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