Comments : Beauty on the inside

  • 16 years ago

    by slighte

    [yes, kay, i do say you are better than me.]

    this is beautiful..
    you used imagery very well here. i could almost see a girl dancing in the snow.

    the last stanza is my fav.

    well done.
    *claps*
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "Leaves crunch under her booted feet,
    As snow begins to fall upon her tongue,
    She spins around like a little girl again,
    She loves the feel of being so young,"

    Wow, this stanza alone was so amazing and really drew me into this. Wonderful wording, that I felt like I was really there.

    "Watching each tiny little crystal,
    Fall upon the cold frozen ground,
    The trees so barren and dark,
    But yet it's so beautiful all around,"

    So very true, I feel the same way, nice rhyming choice.

    Overall, great work, this piece was flawless to me, and really had me entranced by your words. You certainly captured the beauty of winter perfectly and your ending stanza was great too! Keep writing, always and forever...

  • 16 years ago

    by jess and cait

    Leaves crunch under her booted feet,
    As snow begins to fall upon her tongue,
    She spins around like a little girl again,
    She loves the feel of being so young

    i love that part your such of good writer real talent right here keep writing

    5/5
    jess