Comments : Letting Go Of You.

  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    You're gonna be okay hun.
    Dont trip chocolate chip. :]

    I could just feel the sadness oozing from you words, it made the emotion so real and made me feel as if my own heart was broken and I was the one in pain. The expression behind your meaning was flawless. Had me captivated from beginning to end.

    "Tangled thoughts"
    ^sounds familiar lol. Its okay you can use it this once. :]

    Well done.
    *5/5*

  • 16 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    This is such a sad and heartbreaking poem, but you wrote this so beautifully. There was so much emotion and feeling pouring out of this piece, and you really made the reader feel the hurt and pain that you were going through. I hope things do work out okay, and get better. Take care. Keep writing, always and forever...

  • 16 years ago

    by Crystal Rose Blooming

    Such sadness I feel from each of your poems, I hope you are ok for your words worry me. You write so beautifully how I would love to see one of happiness from you. Well done my dear.

  • 16 years ago

    by LockedInEternity

    Your poems share such relevance with people that read them..i can tell.

    the first stanza felt as if it was him that left you.. yet later you continue to state that it was you in fact that had left him...i thought this was interesting because usually poems are written about how upset you are that someone left you.. i liked how this one showed the other side of the story.

    "I'm forced to let go of your delicate hand although-
    I never got to hold it for real; I resist to let go of you."

    ^^ I absolutely loved those two lines!! perfect.

    "A friendship remains, yet love will not blossom a third time."

    ^^ why does it say third time? we only heard about this one time so the # is irrelevant to us really. I would change "third" to "another".

    "You're through with me, the hurt still lingers amongst us."

    ^^ again you make me think that he left you.. who really left who in this love story?

    "Tears continue down my cheeks, staining them with unbearable pain,"

    ^^ beautifully poetic!! another line that i bow down to.

    5/5 keep it up x)

  • 16 years ago

    by Robert

    This was really good and worded very well the visuals made the reader want to know more I liked it alot and know that with time your work would be increasingly better good work keep up the good work.