by LockedInEternity Sep 24, 2008
category :
Friendship, family /
broken friendship
When you mess up, ill still be here |
by BREEawNUHH
Aw. This is wonderful. A beautiful dedication to your friend. Even though at the end you said that the friendship is gone, I still thought it was as great as it could have been. Your word choice was nothing short of perfect. |
by The Queen
One thing I dint like here was the repetition of wipe each tear otherwise it could have been incredibly awesome to me. Some of the words were forced just to go with the rhyme thing. These are just the flaws I can see in this piece other than that, the way how you constructed it was great and somehow easy to read probably coz the sentences were not that long. Plus I liked the vivid image this piece was conveying. On this piece you manage to focus on just one image all throughout the poem. God Job. |
by ledane
Felt the need and wantin in that....great poem.. but with pure honesty igot lost a little on the flow.. |
by Krista
Very interesting. i really liked it. way to go. |
by Paiger
Wow, again amazing, phenominal and awesome :) I have never felt so much from someones poetry, extremly amazing :) |