Hmmm this is not one of my favorites from you, the first 6 stanzas were very good, and i think you might have been a good idea to end the piece there or to come to a closing there. I didn't like how the stanzas changed lengths and the rhyming pattern was thrown off, the last three stanzas were very hard to get into so you might think of rereading this piece and reconstucting it as well. i would give this piece a 3/5 but i will rate so your ranking does not go down