How could i ever forget someone like you?

by Sweet lig   Sep 25, 2008


How could I ever forget someone like you?

Tell me how I could start my life without you?
my heart touches you in different ways;
it takes a year to explain how my love for you is;
it seem your only reason why my heart is whipping;
now it hurts telling me I need to find someone who deserves me;
how I could try to love someone if my heart is lock?
its now lock for your love and you're the only key;
but if there are somebody would attempt to;
not anything could unlock this heart of mine except you;
when you say you love me, I told you I love you more;
not today, tomorrow or everyday but forevermore;
its awful you give me up after all the years had gone by;
after all the time we had shared for this unanticipated love;
whats this life for, if you're gone away;
no matter how many people comes along with me;
and how many of them presented there love for me;
my heart still beats on you, so tell me?
how i could ever forget someone like you?

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  • 16 years ago

    by The Queen

    Sorry i have to redo my comment as there were boxes coming out. kindly please delete the the previous one..Thanks..

    Firstly, I think poems in stanzas are easier for the readers to read. And as per my opinion, it would also be great if it all start wit Caps.

    it seem your only reason why my heart is whipping;
    "your" should be "you're and then the word "the"

    how I could try to love someone if my heart is lock?
    "How could I it should be I think"

    but if there are somebody would attempt to;
    "But if there is somebody"

    whats this life for, if you're gone away;
    "what's this life for"

    no matter how many people comes along with me;
    "people come along"

    and how many of them presented there love for me;
    "presented their"

    how i could ever forget someone like you?
    "How could I"

    I think those are the mistakes in your poem, although grammatically speaking, im not that good as well. Other than that, I loved the emotion set behind the words. Filled with sadness yet positive about the love you have for that person. Good job...

  • 16 years ago

    by The Queen

    Firstly, I think poems in stanzas are easier for the readers to read. And as per my opinion, it would also be great if it all start wit Caps.

    it seem your only reason why my heart is whipping;
    "your" should be “you’re” and then the word "the"

    how I could try to love someone if my heart is lock?
    "How could I it should be I think"

    but if there are somebody would attempt to;
    "But if there is somebody"

    whats this life for, if you're gone away;
    "what’s this life for"

    no matter how many people comes along with me;
    "people come along"

    and how many of them presented there love for me;
    "presented their"

    how i could ever forget someone like you?
    "How could I"

    I think those are the mistakes in your poem, although grammatically speaking, im not that good as well. Other than that, I loved the emotion set behind the words. Filled with sadness yet positive about the love you have for that person. Good job...

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