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by Raychil Sep 25, 2008 category : Friendship, family / best friends
I know I'm not perfect A savior or a saint But I can make you smile Although sometimes its faint I can be the hand you hold When you've fallen down I can be the air you breathe To save you before you drown I can be the shoulder You lean on just to cry I can be the hero To save you before you die I can be your comfort To keep you warm at night I can be your star And shine a guiding light I can be the rain To wash away your tears I can be your eyes So you can see clear I can be the love Pumping in your heart And I can be the one to hold you When the world tears you apart.
by Poet on the Piano
"I can be the hand you hold When you've fallen down I can be the air your breathe To save you before you drown" Third line: "your" should be "you". Otherwise very sweet words here, and your rhyming choice is great. "I can be the rain To wash away your tears I can be your eyes So you can see clear" I love this part, very touching and heartfelt. "I can be the love Pumping in your heart And I can be the one to hold you When the world tears you apart." A great way to end this friendship poem, good work. 5/5 from me. Keep writing, always and forever...