Comments : I'll Be Everything

  • 16 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "I can be the hand you hold
    When you've fallen down
    I can be the air your breathe
    To save you before you drown"

    Third line: "your" should be "you".
    Otherwise very sweet words here, and your rhyming choice is great.

    "I can be the rain
    To wash away your tears
    I can be your eyes
    So you can see clear"

    I love this part, very touching and heartfelt.

    "I can be the love
    Pumping in your heart
    And I can be the one to hold you
    When the world tears you apart."

    A great way to end this friendship poem, good work. 5/5 from me. Keep writing, always and forever...