Sisters

by Sweet lig   Sep 26, 2008


Sisters

God sent us to be sisters

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so we can be best of friends

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for one another

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even when there are pain

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i thank the lord for sending

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my sisters to me

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for whom I truly love and care

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We shared so many things together

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like laughters and tears

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its funny how we sometimes argue

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i guess its normal in this world

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but having you all my sisters

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means a lot to me

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ever since the day we were born

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We may not always together

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we may live each other from afar

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And we may not get to see

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each other as long as we want

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but I hope were never separated

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cuz were each others heart!
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(09-26-08)

I dedicated this poem to all my sisters, I wrote this poem a year ago. Hope u like it!

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  • 16 years ago

    by Paiger

    Not bad ,a few gramatical errors:

    "even when there are pain"
    would have to bee "even when there is pain" or "when we are in pain"

    "like laughters and tears"
    should be like laughter and tears, no S on laughter

    "we may live each other from afar"
    should be "we may live far from eachother"

    Good effort though, not really origonal but nice, work on trying to use metaphors, it beings out more emotion and makes it less likely that you will do the same thing as someone else :)

    Just some constructice criticism, don't take it the wrong way, your a great poet, hope i was of some help :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Hannah

    This really great poetry bout ur sis, u had portrayed your message very well. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Krista

    Very nice wording, loved the flow and how you wrote it.
    very nice. keep it up