Comments : A gamblers demise

  • 16 years ago

    by NoUr

    WOW!!!!!
    I think this is the best poem anyone can read abt gambling!!!!!!! so true/right/simple
    PERFECT!!
    words perfectly chosen, perfectly written...
    as the rest of ur poems i guess!!

    keep it up, ingrid :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Grant Gilbert AKA Slash

    A fast paced read well chosen subject, very nice rhyme to the whole poem although the meter was slightly off, i felt that with such a short poem shortening the syllable count on some lines would improve it a bit.

    Table is set
    Place you bet
    Roll the dice
    Dont think twice
    Push the limits
    Think in digits
    Blinded by greed
    Feeding the need
    Reach for the goal
    Selling your soul
    There's no surprise
    Inevitable demise

    your poem is very nice these few changes i think improve the meter slightly, just a suggestion

    Grant