Sigh.
he's so much mroe than just a pretty face
messy hair
and a loud voice.
he has friends outside of the bubble called
Coventry High.
he has a life, a family
other people.
where do I fit into
all of that?
who are these people who love him
so dearly
who he has left,
but still remembers?
is there someone over there
yonder to where we are now
who holds a place in his heart?
who can see his every thought and understand him
in a way i never will?
does he look at someone and wish
to be with them?
is his heart alread consumed by someone else?
what chance do i really have
in this game?
am i merely playing a game of russian roulette
by myself?
is there actualy, no chance
yet i continue to play?
maybe i should just put my gun away,
leave it locked away
with my heart
and other
tools of the trade.
let him have everyone else
and just be happy
to have
a bullet left.
"Sigh.
he's so much mroe than just a pretty face
messy hair
and a loud voice."
"mroe" should be "more".
The first line, "sigh" didn't catch my eye at all, so maybe write something like this:
"I sigh heavily, contemplating all of him."
Or something like that, just an idea.
The form in this poem wasn't written in the best way, and at points is hard to read. Because sometimes there is two words, then on the next line ten, and so forth. I would be them into stanzas and try to make the lines almost even, like this:
"he has a life, a family, other people.
where do I fit into all of that?
who are these people who love him so dearly
who he has left, but still remembers?"
Also, in some places in your poem, your i's aren't capitalize, so I would do that, just proper grammer.
"is his heart alread consumed by someone else?"
"alread" should be "already".
"leave it locked away
with my heart
and other
tools of the trade.
let him have everyone else
and just be happy
to have
a bullet left."
I really like what you wrote here, but again, I would go back fix the errors I pointed out, and try to put this poem in separte stanzas, making it easier to read. Keep writing, always and forever....