Blue (club challenge)

by Grant Gilbert AKA Slash   Sep 27, 2008


Blue

Witch's schemes and darkest dreams
My thoughts return to you, it seems
You said that I may not depart
Holding onto my stolen heart

You cast a spell that you called blue
To chain my heart and keep it true
No matter how I fight and strain
Forgotten freedom I cannot regain

You ply me with your wily charms
As I stepped into your open arms
This spell you've cast I cannot break
Misguided thoughts of a scaly snake

You come to me in plain disguise
Confuse my mind to my surprise
Either heavens fondest dream
Or wicked witch's ugly scheme

My heart knows not which way to turn
For you it seems, it always yearns
This stolen heart that's chained and true
You cast a spell that you called blue

Grant
02h20
27.09.2008
Copyright © 2008 Grant Mark Gilbert

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  • 16 years ago

    by Wereallbladesarntwe

    Top notch write mate, love the image you created in my minds eye, keep up the excellent work mate, cheers xp

  • 16 years ago

    by Ingrid

    My heart knows not which way to turn
    For you it seems, it always yearns
    This stolen heart that's chained and true
    You cast a spell that you called blue
    ^^^My favorite stanza:)

    I really loved the fst pace in which you wrote it, indeed it felt kinda like reading a song:)
    Ah, love...the things we do and accept for it:)

    Well done Grant:)

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 16 years ago

    by Jennifer RIP Lesthat Hayden

    Claps* Bravo this was wonderful. The only thing I have to ask about is whenever you mentioned Witches schemes. I'm asuming you mean witch's, which is ownership, as in it's the which who is scheming, it's her scheme.

    Other than that lovely.

    The rhyming was perfect and the flow was brilliant, oh and I know the contest and I thought it was a wonderful use of blue.

    Five out of five.

  • 16 years ago

    by Faithless

    I love how u infuse heaven and wicthcraft in ur love poetry interesting concept

  • 16 years ago

    by Shellaine shelli

    How very unsurprising that you have added another poem that leaves the reader absolutely speechless because it is so amazing!!! you know you really do have a lot of talent and your style of writing is just so unique and beautiful. i just loved the images your words portrayed, your descriptions were unbelievable. I really hope that you don't ever give up with writing because you have really got a lot of talent. and never fail 2 amaze!!! really wish i was able to give you more than just a 5 because you so deserve more!!! take care

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