Lightness Is Her Enemy.

by Courageous Dreamer   Sep 27, 2008


Actual Title:
Lightness is her Enemy, Darkness is her best friend.

Foggy mind full of thoughts that lack optimism
cause unbearable pain that resists to die.
Mascara bleeds down her face leaving streaks.
So black with pure sadness upon her once lovely face.

The sun no longer shines, it despises her existance.
Everyday it hides behind the clouds; knowing she's alive.
All it wants is to see her drown in her bloody tears,
and be washed away with the happiness that once remained.

It's brightness wishes she would disappear into the lonely world.
It has stole her heart along with that smile that used to radiate.
Alone, lost, without the sunlight she's in complete darkness.
Yet when she's with the darkness, she feels at home.

Lightness is her enemy; darkness is her best friend.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Robert

    I liked to poem but I think you could have gone into greater detail. The visual were good but for the most part it lack a constant story to hold the attention of the reader just a thought Plot121

  • 16 years ago

    by LockedInEternity

    Your poems have the best imagery! Every time i read them, its like I can see verse after verse playing out in my mind.
    Your use of vocabulary is also incredible. Basically, the words you use light up your poem.

    "It's brightness wishes she would disappear into the lonely world."
    > this line confuses me a little in its formation. Who's brightness wishes she would disappear?
    maybe you mentioned it earlier in the poem and i just missed it. hmm.

    this poem is still amazing though.. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Kaila

    Very original piece you have here. I found that it was an enjoyable read and a lot of good lines stood out making me want more. Ex. when you said that the mascara bled down her face I haven't heard it written that way which is cool. great job nothing to fix for me here
    5.5
    kaila

  • 16 years ago

    by Crystal Rose Blooming

    My goodness this is so sad. I hope you're not having these emotions . Your poem is nice in it's sad attitude. Such great structure and emotion.
    I know these emotion, the sadness and emptiness you write about. Time heals my dear although slowly and painfully

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