My goodness this is so sad. I hope you're not having these emotions . Your poem is nice in it's sad attitude. Such great structure and emotion. |
by Kaila
Very original piece you have here. I found that it was an enjoyable read and a lot of good lines stood out making me want more. Ex. when you said that the mascara bled down her face I haven't heard it written that way which is cool. great job nothing to fix for me here |
Your poems have the best imagery! Every time i read them, its like I can see verse after verse playing out in my mind. |
by Robert
I liked to poem but I think you could have gone into greater detail. The visual were good but for the most part it lack a constant story to hold the attention of the reader just a thought Plot121 |