Comments : Seasons Transform

  • 16 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "Dark fluffy clouds begin to form
    Fall is forgotten as the seasons transform
    Cold freezing winds nip at your nose
    Giving your face a cherry red glow"

    Absolutely stunning descriptions, your rhyming and flow is excellent, and this perfectly describes the beginning of the season winter.

    "Warm fuzzy sweaters and jackets of down
    Keeping you warm while winters around
    A tasty hot chocolate warms you inside
    Wood in the fireplace, the cold is denied"

    So true, I like how you clearly state the greatness of winter, and its enjoyment.

    "Kids and adults join laughing in delight
    Nothing can match a snowball fight
    Crystalline icicles form in the trees
    Snowflakes swirl and dance with ease"

    Great word choice, just reading this stanza makes me smile and wish that winter could come sooner.

    "Children in mittens and mommas in gloves
    Building a snowman with care and love
    As the day closes and the night is anew
    Warm in our beds sleep well overdue"

    I especially like the last two lines, you really leave the reader feeling satisfied at what they read, and you definetly took me on a journey through your words. I could see these scenes throughout winter going through my mind, nice visuals. A great read, that will have anyone smiling and cherishing winter even more after they read this. 5/5 from me. Keep writing, always and forever...

  • 16 years ago

    by Frozen hearT

    Another great piece from you.....
    i had a gd read...... love this poem.......

    (Giving your face a cherry red glow)

    i like this line.......
    well keep writing......... read more of ur poems soon =)

  • 16 years ago

    by NEIL MUNRO

    This is just brilliant You have some talent girl, waiting for the next one.

  • 16 years ago

    by LoreNz0

    Ohh this cool poem sent chillz though my spine.
    incredible write and a wounderful read.
    the flow and verses wer great and it gives the reader such a warm feeling.
    the picture u painted was cloourful and bright, definatly a 5* no doubt abotu it. =D