A Person Left...

by IdTakeABulletForYou   Sep 27, 2008


Inside my head you'll always be
the one with everything I need;
inside my heart, you'll always stay
the one I think of every day.

In all my dreams you will remain
the cause of every ounce of pain;
My broken heart speaks loud and clear
that when I called, you were not near.

I keep a sacred place inside
for all these hopes, where none resides;
To always love you --here or not--
but let you go and let me rot.

You see, love's something we erect,
--a game of causes and effects--
to see if what we build will stay
or watch as it crumbles away.

You do the math and start to find
that people lack the want or time
to stay with just a single soul
until we let our own souls go.

It's what I want that hurts me so:
A heart to hold and not let go.
These days, you'd be hard tried to find
a person left who has the time.

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  • 12 years ago

    by Chloe DeWitt

    This is really good! i love reading your poems because they always seem to connect with my past...

  • 15 years ago

    by Bradley Peter

    I think it's hard to write a really good love poem, so well done for trying. I personally wasn't impressed with it, because it felt too simple, not that poems should be complex. It just felt like it was being forced, and was trying too hard to make it work. Sorry.

    Brad

  • 16 years ago

    by Dark Savior

    This is a pretty good poem.

    There are a few places where you could polish it if I was a college prof. but last time I checked I wasn't.

    Very well done. I give it a:
    5/5

    Thank you very much for sharing.

  • 16 years ago

    by ghosts in bloom

    This is a wonderful piece, I really enjoyed it. Matter of fact, I have already read it twice (:
    It conveys a common, and deep place of the heart in a very simplistic and beautiful way. The cadence was practically flawless. It has some ideas/statements in it as well that I don't read too often.

    "You see, love's something we erect,
    --a game of causes and effects--"

    So true.

    "You do the math and start to find
    that people lack the want or time
    to stay with just a single soul
    until we let our own souls go."

    I love that stanza (: Love is selfless and selfish all in four letters. One has to be entirely stable and complete within themselves before being able to 'let their souls go' so to speak, in order to truly give to someone else. At least that is my view on things, in a (very short) summary.

    Nicely written, 5/5* Keep writing down the bones, take care,
    `Nova

  • 16 years ago

    by xxxStarSxxx

    Great poem! I love it. The best part is, I can totally empathize.

    "I keep a sacred place inside
    for all these hopes, where none resides;
    To always love you --here or not--
    but let you go and let me rot."

    ^^^This is my favorite stanza. I think that it's the basis of the whole poem.

    Well done!
    5/5

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