As breanne said, Izz iddybiddy. But it's perfect, the length...the shortness shows how constricting the points are..

Into the black
How subdued we all feel now
Dripping from the sink

^^ This first stanza sort of instills a false sense of calmness, i guess? With subdued and black and dripping, they're all gentle words. Numb, but gentle..

What a strange feeling
We are trapped in our on thoughts
We are trapped in flaws

^^ Um...like...*jawdrop*. Isn't that the truth though? We're so wrapped up in hating ourselves that we never get to see the beauty that's out there also...we're all confined to our own heads, no matter how well we can communicate. and it's so human, how frustrating that is. we should be able to scream and have it be over but it never does finish that way..i adore this stanza, jesse. it says so much in so little..i'm sorry i am that way..

What a way to die
What a way to live right now
I thought I could fly

^^ I really like this one as well. The entire poem is strong, gradually building on itself which is hard to do in such a small block...the last line is breath taking, wesse. it's just....you fall down and you're just sitting there going...how did i get here? can't i fly?

beautiful, jesse..

5/5