Inside the Fence

by Lu   Sep 29, 2008


Inside the Fence

Monotonous cackling of hens
wafts through the parlour room
Cutting eyes with pouted lips
pungent smell of brassy perfume

Hollow words slither across air
tickling the fancy of eager ears
Slash to climb, stairs of popularity
gain rank from another's tears

Sharpen the blades upon the tongue
chatter blindly at one's expense
Snip nosed to backyard clutter
and absent rails of their own fence

*One should tidy up the garbage in their own back yard before passing judgment on someone else's*

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  • 16 years ago

    by trippetta TC

    Thought it was well written, & something I've been dealing w/ as well, one of my dads best sayings always was one should clean up their own backyard before looking over their neighbors fence

  • 16 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Ohhh..how true!! I just love the words you
    have used and I also feel the emotions behind it. I especially liked this part..

    Hollow words slither across air
    tickling the fancy of eager ears
    Slash to climb, stairs of popularity
    gain rank from another's tears

    Excellet write. Take care

  • 16 years ago

    by Cindy

    Luanne
    You did an excellent job on this piece. Word choices and imagery are great. The message awesome :)
    Love Cindy

  • 16 years ago

    by Deana

    Excellent metaphors Luanne, I can't stand people like that...and you are so right ,if they worried more about their own problems they wouldn't have so much time to gossip.

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