When Dreams Previal.

by Stephanie   Sep 30, 2008


I've been burning down bridges left and right,
looking for some sympathy beyond these false lies.
Praying for a piece of truth that's buried down deep,
something to pull me out of all these midnight cries.

Though every leaf that's been unturned is torture,
because they all lead to your name and hurt face.
They still leave me breathless in all this pain and agony,
as I strive to move on without all of your lying grace.

I've been burnt one too many times by your fire,
and I've been stomped on without a glimpse of care.
So I guess you could say I'm sick of being so weak -
but you've always given me too much pain to bear.

My eyes are directed and concentrated upon the future,
to a time that I may be able to smile every single day.
However, I still find you stomping on all of my dreams,
simply because your own sadness won't go away.

And I'm sick of standing to the side while you kill me,
with all of the useless nonsense you hate yourself for.
Because I could be doing just fine and dandy on my own,
if your face wasn't here; So please dad, give me a little more.

I can't live in this world afraid of this shadow; your shadow,
when you're not here to help me dance away the cold nights.
Especially when you vowed to always stay with me -
Though I find your words are half-honest; Never quite right.

Daddy, why is it that you're the one liar I can't forget?
Why is it that I still seem to miss you when all else fails?
Because I'm still crawling on my knees in desperation,
hoping that one day, these midnight dreams might prevail.

September 29, 2008
(c) Stephanie Lynn.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Lauren

    I Love this piece!! It's very powerful and flows really well. It's a very beautiful poem. Great Job. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Ignoris

    Nice job, very well written, rhyming was amazing. The topic was beautifully represented; it's amazing how such sadness and pain can create such beauty.
    Keep writing!
    Chin up, Eleni

  • 16 years ago

    by Nobodys Hero

    First of all i really liked the choice of heading you used, as for the poem i thought it was a beautiful write, the wording was very good throughout and the stanzas were written very well =]

  • 16 years ago

    by BREEawNUHH

    "I've been burning down bridges left and right,
    looking for some sympathy beyond these false lies."

    -- I love these first two lines. I think that if others could get past the words alone to see the meaning of them, they'd see why I think they're so beautiful.

    "I've been burnt one too many times by your fire,
    and I've been stomped on without a glimpse of care."

    -- This is amazing. It shows a great deal of hurt and emotion. Sometimes it can be difficult to show emotion through writing, but you've done a wonderful job.

    "My eyes are directed and concentrated upon the future,
    to a time that I may be able to smile every single day."

    -- Wow. Your word choice is beautiful. I like the positivity [if that's a word..?] in these lines. They're basically saying that even though you've been hurt, you're still looking for something/someone that will be able to make you happy everyday.

    "Because I could be doing just fine and dandy on my own,
    if your face wasn't here; So please dad, give me a little more."

    -- "dad"? Wow. I wasn't expecting it to be about a family member. I felt as though it seemed like it was talking about someone who you were in a romantic relationship with. Total shocker.

    "I can't live in this world afraid of this shadow; your shadow,
    when you're not here to help me dance away the cold nights.
    Especially when you vowed to always stay with me -
    Though I find your words are half-honest; Never quite right."

    -- This stanza makes me sad. It shows that you want your father to be in your life, to help you with things that you're going through, but he's not there.

    "Daddy, why is it that you're the one liar I can't forget?
    Why is it that I still seem to miss you when all else fails?
    Because I'm still crawling on my knees in desperation,
    hoping that one day, these midnight dreams might prevail."

    -- This is an amazing stanza. A beautiful way to end the piece, and once again, your word choice is stunning. It's full of emotion, which is wonderful.

    Five out of five. [5/5]

    ``Briana

  • 16 years ago

    by The Queen

    Youre a very talented writer. Whatever ways work for you and you would still have a lot of things to say and express. your poems are all expressive be it may in few words or by stanzas. I liked the somehow anger then turned to sadness emotion within the poem. There was no single line that i think was off within the poem. Stunningly done.Good job.

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