Very good! I can relate very much to this one. Continued sucess.

This was easy to relate with but I didn't like the repitition and it was too simple in my opinion. Although the emotions were dark and deep, you could have expressed yourself a little better with expanded vocabulary and imagery to make it more original.

"ALone in my heart is a vast emptyness"
^This line doesn't really make sense.

"But patches become worn and they peal."
^"Peel" not "peal"

You used the word "know" too much here making the poem lose meaning and have a rocky flow. The emotions were strong but this could be much better.

*4/5*

I think this would be better if you use it as a lyric. I liked the style of your writing. Keep writing.