Wow so dark.
The flow of this poem is so different form others that i have read..
i like the way some of the lines repeat.
it give the whole poem a better flow...
and i also like the way you use the metaphor of god and the devil to describe the this life and it's society.. well at least that's what i got from reading your poem. if i'm wrong go ahead and correct me. =D

keep writting you have so much talent!!

**Ada**
*aBSwaBHiaPL*

A very dark yet awesome poem =]
It gave me the chills while I was reading it and I thought it flowed perfectly. I also really thought the repitition of words at the begining was brilliant, wicked job ^^

A delightful read.You captured my attention and my imagination here.The words chosen and the way you potray your thoughts and your emotions is really in depth.I admire the way you extract such images and write them with such intensity.I will still be mulling over this poem over and over again, trying to decipher the mystery in this poem.

I couldn't ask for a better dark poem than this.

Very creative way of word usage. ;)

I think I would appreciate this more if I heard it sung to music. It is obviously an emotion charged piece and it would be even more powerful to a tune.
Keep writing, Greta.