This poem is sad again because as ur friend i know wats goin on. All u can do is keep ur faith and hold ur head up high and dont let go of the love u guys share ok

Hi, again Mootmoot. I want to help you with this poem If you don't mind.

you wrote in the section;
Even though I'm alone
And in grieve

Try this;
Even though I'm alone
I'm alone to grieve.
Or...
I am here to grieve.

That would make more sense and it still wrimes with the word, leave.

In the phrase...
Why treat us different...
add, "y" to say...
Why treat us differently.

I hope you don't mind if I pick appart your poem to help you make it better. In the end it's up to you what you want to do. Please don't take it the wrong way, my freind. ;)