Okay very dark and interesting.
The detail you gave in this poem was perfect. the poem not only told me the darkness of it, but also showed it to me...

I completely agree with LJ Roodt

your piece of art was captivating and it had me wanting more...

love the way you gave two sides of a person's mind when they want to die and then give deeper meaning of what that person should have done.

Oh amazing!!!

**Ada**
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A verydark well written poem, interesting choice of heading too!
I really did enjoy every line of this poem it was horrifyingly good, and there was a lot of depth put into it too, amazing job this piece is worth much more than 5/5

Wonderful presentation and flow of ideas........

Wow what a beautiful use of words to express yourself through imagery. Just blew me away. Very dark and captivating which had me hooked from the beginning and left me wanting more in the end. It was very well written with a lot of depth and power. Everything just flowed flawlessly and it was very clear what you were getting across without a feeling of being lost. I could tell you took a lot of time and put thought into this and it showed....a flawless masterpiece and something you should be proud of.

Well done.
*5/5*

Dominicanpriincess09@yahoo.com

AMAZI N WORK

Good work i like how you expressed what you feel and it was deep and had lotes of understanding

Thank you for not making me have to take out a dictionary this time! x)

This was a very well-written piece, dark in it's topic, brilliant in it's description. Your choice of words was brilliant, the order as well as style.

"Alone again with all my friends, now shy of conversation;
Contradicting past confessions, I've been ordained a priest.
My boyfriend left." Kill yourself. "I'm a drunk." Kill yourself.
Crypts 786, 483, 295: I am the reason you're deceased."

^This stanza really stood out for me. The third line was very powerful, and your usage of the repitition was exceptionally well done. And then, your addition with the last line wrapped it all up nicely, making me shiver and yet nod with awe. 5/5