Comments : Broke the lock and the key.

  • 16 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Syla,

    such an emotional write..

    A key can unlock a heart,
    if you can match it up right.
    One turn of motion,
    can envolve a lot of emotion.
    ^
    Likening love to a key is something we can all relate to. If that key manages to turn, then it opens up a whole new world.

    Not everyone can hold the key,
    not everyone has a locked heart.
    Some have been broken,
    some fell apart,and those stuck with the key
    will never have the chance to try.
    ^
    This interesting..exploring the emotional states of differing people. It is true some people fall in love too easy (no key needed) whilst others need the skills of a locksmith and then even they may fail, especially if that heart has been broken and extra securities have been put in place, or if the lock has jammed or fallen apart..entry is impossible..a life of loneliness. :(

    Never do I want to trust you with this key,
    i hide my heart,but i know my feelings wont deplete.
    Its hard to tell you that your hurting me,
    i shouldnt of trusted you..
    ^
    This sounds like am ex-lover, who has broken your lock (trust/heart). If you reveal just how much they have hurt you, it would open you up to potentially further pain. The memory of love is all too fresh, too vivid.

    How are we to love if we don't ever trust?

    Now I sit here,staring at the pieces,
    nothing is left that can be put back together,
    ^
    Lovely imagery here..I see fragmented pieces of metal, springs, cogs (heart, tears, pain)

    no reason left for me to smile.
    The day is ending quick,and my eyes are sinking in tears,their not cleansing my soul anymore.
    ^
    A desperate message, full of emotion. I like that way you describe eyes sinking into tears. It is like there are so many tears that the eyes have become heavy, saturated with them, so much so that they now sink. Ver good! :)

    Tonight I will fall apart,and there is nothing you can do,
    but imagine what you did.
    ^
    There is no way that anyone reading this can't sympathise with your grief. When you experience this much pain, what else is there to do but hurt.

    A very good write from you. You have clearly described in poetic terms how you feel. Love is a profound emotion and one that can lift you to the heavens one day and then pull that cloud from under you and send you hurtling to hell the next.

    Pain of this magnitude is only temporary and light is always ahead of you. It is true the pain can last many years, even a lifetime, but not so much that you can't enjoy life again. Look around at the world, hear the birds, the childrens laughter, the sun, the seasons beauty. There is much to remind you that love is all around and not just in one person.

    Take care :)

    Michael