Kay
Congrats on your win for the Title contest :)
This was such a deserving poem. The emotions pour from your words and I cried with you.

Cedar scented memories
under lock and key
keeping them there safely
so no one else can see
finger paint mementos
along with a pre-k test
now are shrouded safely
placed in a wooden chest

How many of us mothers keep these treasures. That mean so much to our hearts. That we pull out years from the time they were made. Bring back those days once again when our children were still small.

crayon marks upon the wall
when paper was too bland
masterpieces drawn
though from a child's hand
disguised behind new paint
in someone else's home
canvas to another child
whose imagination roams

This stanza brought a smile to my face remembering all the pencil and crayon marks I have scrubbed off walls :)

nothing in this precious box
can bring me peace of mind
only there as fragments
of a past that's left behind
so, fall November rain
disguise these solemn tears
bury these remains
with his youthful years

Such a heart breaking stanza. All that remain are those few treasures you saved from his childhood. No they don't take the pain away from losing him. Hopefully one day looking upon them again, you will be able to smile recalling your memories with him. May he rest in peace.

I love you
Cindy

Congratulations on the win Kay ..... a very deserving win I must say

Such a touching poem ~wipes tear~
Take care Kay
Much love
Luanne

This is a beautiful poem.
i love the nostalgic theme.

i am absolutely breath-taken by this poem.
my favourite stanza would have to be :
Cedar scented memories
under lock and key
keeping them there safely
so no one else can see
finger paint mementos
along with a pre-k test
now are shrouded safely
placed in a wooden chest

the first two lines are wonderful..

you are an amazing writer.

A beautiful, beautiful poem DD. Congratulations on your win. Rightfully deserved.

This poem was one of the best poems I have ever seen on this site. Im sorry about your loss but this person must have been really special to you because u took the time out to create a masterpiece in his memory. Good work

Oh my gosh! so incredible sad. "so, fall November rain" gave me shivers! keep up the good work!

Nice!
Very sad but optimistic in it's own way, rain helps a lot.. true.

Magical SImply magical!!! 5/5 ... Last stanza is a Killer

Wow i give you a 5/5=] a job well done that was magnificent!

This is an amazing poem. i give you 5/5

A beautiful touching tribute to a special person in your life. Brought tears to me eyes.

Excellent, excellent, excellent! Well thought out and cleverly constructed. Deep and meaningful and it pulls at the heart strings. Rhythm , flow impeccable! What a well deserving win. It could break the strongest heart. Very well done!

The reason that i even chose to read this poem- to be honest November Rain by G'n'R is one of my ultime favourite songs and that caught my eye.

I don't really no what to say apart from that was a touching poem- and you honoured it with the way in which it was wrote.. it was outstandingly good poetry.

Its amazing you no what moms really do keep to remind them off your childhood, i no my moms ggota box with little paintings i done with my fingers. the ending off the first stanza really brings home emotions, the innocence of childhood being locked up in a box its almost tearjerking.

crayon marks upon the wall
when paper was too bland
masterpieces drawn
though from a child's hand
disguised behind new paint
in someone else's home
canvas to another child
whose imagination roams
- this is really my favorite stanza- it reminds me off my little sister, you wrote this so delicately- showing the delicate nature of a child and life. teh words flow amazingly, and just the actually style of the poem is fabulous and well written.

so, fall November rain
disguise these solemn tears
bury these remains
with his youthful years
- this small part will be something that will stick in my mind for a very long time and thats not an exageration. the pain of this and the imagery yo uuse throughout well it would undermine your abilities if i said it was good. firstly, all your innocent child things are locked away and then technically you are too, its a very sad and emotional thing to think about.

Normally i would go on about punctuation at the end of lines and capital letters, but a poem written like this well it wouldn't add nothing to it.

I really and truly enjoyed reading this, but when you look past the poetic techniques i'm sorry you lost the person that inspired this poem.

amy x

WOW!! This is by far one of the best poems
I have read to date.You have won a spot on my vave list, I look forward to reading alot more of your writings.