I have one critique for this piece- you used 'filler-words' -her and she- too many times, and that ruined the natural flow of the poem on some places. |
Well done (: Another heart grabbing piece. Short, but packing a ton of raw emotion, and punch. A few things that stood out to me were your use of "resisted abandon." I absolutely love that! Also, |
by sezz
Amazing but im not surprised, very great viusal and heart wrenching emotions, easily puts the reader in this persons shoes |