Okay nice poem. but i think you could have done a little better with it. probably a little more description and rhyming...
Your word choice was good. the end however didn't flow too well, but over all i liked your poem.

*keep writting!

**Ada**
*aBSwaBHiaPL*

I really like the way it's worded , and how even though it doesn't rhyme , it has a flow to it . 4/5