Comments : First Impressions</3

  • 16 years ago

    by sexyCheckers

    I like this poem, its unique... But a bit of advice to help with the flow (Im being a hipocrite, because not many of my poems have a good flow) If you have the same number of syllables in each line it works well :)

    P.s. LOVE the ending
    "although you did take
    a stab at my heart
    then left a scar.
    even at my worst, theres
    a dim light coming
    from the dark.
    you left me in bad condition
    with but one scar,
    but thank you! you let
    me go, before i fell
    to far... "

    Specially the last part! Can totally relate.

    Much love.xo