Your porm is a little shaky but the messege in it and your pain was very strong.

Keep writting!

**Ada**
*aBSwaBHiaPL*

Firstly please capitilize every first letter of every line please!! It is propper and a former pet peeze of a lot of poets..Other than that the poem is very choppy...Try to read it out loud and try to smooth it out..I feel the emotion in some aspects but its just not written as well