This is excellent. The way you shift from a strong romantic theme to one of almost (I stress "almost") regretted homicidal malice is done in a very precise and decisive manner. It gripped me, it really did. It reminded me of Nick Cave's song, Where The Wild Roses Grow, which is a personal favourite of mine.

Subject matter of this nature is rarely tackled well on this site, and I applaud you for it. Just edit away all the unnecessary capitals and you've got yourself a 5 from me. And I almost never rate.

Wow.....such a beautiful, sweet, dark twisted poem...

The detail was wonderful. i could picture it so clearly... a true artist can only do this...
The twist of your poem was simply perfect...
The first stanzas were you described her so beautiful was perfect. and the the next stanza were she lied and decieved you that too was simply flawless...at frist i thought you were talking about the her cheating and now she's paying it with the person she cheated with...
but then the last stanza was simply dark and twisted...the speaker killed her.... and so much detail...simply scary, dark and again twisted!

you get a 150% from me!!

hehe
**Ada**
*aBSwaBHiaPL*

Well... *sigh* it seems all that I've wanted to say has been said. In fact, i am sad now... i have nothing to say. It was a very... emotional poem. To say the least. Very well written. I have nothing more to say since all that i wanted to has already been said.
Never stop writing.
*Chaotic Angel*

You make me harder than triganometry

The imagery was fantastic. I loved the switch from helpless romantic to coldblooded killer. I wasn't expecting that ending at all. Word choice was very effective. Very nice job. It was almost enough to make me sad, but at the same time, oddly happy. I loved the title as well. 5/5

Wow , good job .

Woahh..that was unexpected..
awesome twist..
i liked it. :)

Your hair was silk and golden blonde
Blowing gracious in the breeze
Your walk and the bounce there in your step
Sent me weak down to my knees

freaking adorable.
your really good at writing and very descriptive and such.
ima read more now :)

This was really good. so sweet!! i loved it! keep it up. your writing is amazing!!! please read/comment some of mine???

Haha best thing ever!!! its funny and cool .

I really don't know what to say about this except that it it amazing, you did a fantastic job!