So much emotion seeps from this poem...
"I feel like a child playing
Running through sprinkler mist
Chasing the rainbow before me
And happy to chase it endlessly"
flawless stanza.. love the way you started this poem... it just descibes the way a happy child should be.. runnig around...innocent.

"I hope like a child antisipating"
ok this line is wonderful, but anticipating was spelled wrong...
"Laying in bed on christmas morning
Leaping out of bed excited
Sprinting to see what lays ahead'
Love the way the words in this stanza flow so perfect.. a child so happy. on christmas day...it makes me think of my brothers and their first real christmas...simply lovely

"I want like a child seeing
If you have it I want it
Must be good if you have it
You gave it up, don't want it now "
>the beggining of this stanza if a little off..
maybe if you word it like this:
>I want like a child
seeing if you have it
it must be good if you do
>then the last line you can just put it alone b/c it doesn't quuite go with the stanza above..
"you gave it up, i don't want it now"

anyway is only advice..
like i said your an wasome writter!!
**Ada**
*aBSwaBHiaPL*

This is great! i love it... lol sometimes i still feel like a child too..and i'm 20 years old! amazing!!

Yes i agree, amazing but would we expect anything less from you?