Comments : To Lose Your Mind

  • 16 years ago

    by Ignoris

    Nice job, one of your better ones!
    One thing though, I think it may improve if the last stanza stayed consistent with the rest and included four lines instead of two. Otherwise, it gives a slight feeling of incompleteness.
    But nice job.
    Chin up, Eleni

  • 16 years ago

    by Still Slightly Broken

    Yes, what if everyone you ever loved or cared about were to drop dead this instant, why do we even bother to keep breathing, what is the point. Sure, there are people that love us, and say they could not live without us, but if we were really to die, would they follow us into the afterlife? If there even is an afterlife. Just things I'm curios about.
    An excellent piece of work.
    Great flow.
    5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Christopher Wry

    Interestinon questions. Alass there be no hard and fast snawer think I.