It was a beautiful poem. I wished you made it longer though. What I like in this poem was... You can clearly read it from start to finish. The rhyming on the poem was very good, it really enhance the flow of the poem.

The sun shines brightly in her eyes:
- I rarely see people use. ':' For me indifference = Good.

Her wings, they span miles apart;
Soaring through the air, gaining a head-start.
- Excellent imagery you got here. I pictured a flying girl in my mind.

Keep up the good work.

I love this poem, most of the time i don't even take time to read dark poems, but this poem, so good. 5/5. hope u win the contest.

Very beautiful. I enjoy this poem. Keep on writing, kel.