The poem was good for me, but it was really "excellent"

I feel that you could have done better, It wasn't the fact that it didn't have any rythme's at the end, I felt that the over all flow of the poem was up and down, up and down, then down, then up for a while.

If you count the syll. there are too many in most of the verses.

I really wanted to give it a 5, but it jut wasn't there for me.

4/5

I liked the imagery and descriptions. Keep up the work :).