by BREEawNUHH Oct 6, 2008
category :
Love, romance /
desired love
--FIRST attempt at this form. Be nice. :P |
This is a really interesting form, it seems almost so difficult, there's a syllable count AND a rhyme scheme. But, it's always good to see a poet trying different forms.. it just means you are improving! Great work. I didn't see anything with this that I would have changed. I thought the first few stanzas really brought a lot of imagery into my mind, whether it was intended or not. I think you did a good job, if you do a few more with this form you will be an expert I'm sure. Good job! (; 5/5 |
by Melpomene
Another interesting style. I don't believe i've wrote one of these before so it was lovely to learn something new. |
by Roxy
Wow, I really need to learn poem techniques :P I've never heard of this one before. It's really good for your first try although I wouldn't know seeing as I don't really know this type of poem Haha . I liked the second stanza the most because it told a lot of meaning and I also like the words you use to rhyme like stop and teardrop >> I would have honestly never have thought that up mine would have been something like stop and drop :P that's how good I am haha. |
by kelleyana
This poem draw my attention, i like the way she combine french and english to make a game. I will surely write a poem titled left with doubt. Really great poem, you go girl... |
This poem is really good. ad the message that you give out is really good.=) |