Lord, please,
Shine your light upon my soul.
Lord, please,
Come and cleanse my body whole.

^^^This repetion made it a really strong poem. I love how you portayed you feelings, Peter.
Life can wear us down sometimes...and to such a degree we want to give up...but it is our will to live and our love for God and our fellow men that always keeps us strong:)
A powerful poem, keep writing and you will go far!

Hugs,

5/5 Ingrid

Oh.. wow!! the words where amazing.. I loved it.. Awesome job.. i'll be reading on.. =)

WOW!!
Read something of that kind for the first time... It actually sounded like a movie when i was reading it,, NO OFFENCES...

I mean i was wondering whats gonna happen next?? oR what could it be?? n stuff..

And not to mention dud, you certainly reflect the wild fire of Africa in you!!
Anyways, did you kill the shark...I'm gonna report to the marine department about it...LOLZ!!!
xDDD

Keep it up.!..

~TwiTcH

Nicely penned writing..