Wow! where did this stuff come from?? darling, this is the best you've written! ever!

I like this a lot. It makes you think about the language and the themes at the same time which is wonderful. And I like the continuation of lethargy, mentioning it at the beginning and end but carrying it through the poem.

My only advice here would be to make sure you really grab the reader, perhaps make it a little more personal to them.. somehow.
Sorry, that's not such great advice.

I still adore this, 5/5

jess ~

Victriolic eyes stare with sanguinary appeal
at the embellished despotism
that comes with unyielding defeat;

^ great job there i love love love those lines honestly

it was great to read something that took some thinking and had complexity to it you know? like your vocab was so great! 5/5